Introduction #1:
Knowledge carries great weight in society. It can be used for good or bad in the sense that a person can use their knowledge to lead the nation, or to become a criminal mastermind. It has a never ending potential as there becomes more of it. Metaphor is knowledge. The english language is comprised of metaphors so much so that it goes completely unnoticed in many situations. Literal language and metaphor are interwoven so tightly that they can be confused with each other. Once someone is able to use metaphor to their advantage, they instantly become more intelligent, better at communicating, even charming. This is the power that metaphor holds. It can be used to compare a known subject with an unknown subject to make something more understandable. Metaphor helps people think innovatively and conceptualize new things. It can do incredibly beneficial things, but it has some downsides. A person can be hurt by metaphors if they understand them in a different way than someone intended. Much like knowledge, metaphor has great strength and can do great damage.
Introduction #2:
Everyone has a perception of who they are. The aspects of society that affect them, such as cultural values, media, and influential people can also shape the way a person may think of his or herself. A person’s perception of their physical and mental self can completely change their outlook on life. An altered outlook on life can diminish the potential that a person has in his or her own life. A large factor of how people are affected is through language and understanding of language. Within language, there is metaphor. Metaphor is a way to compare a known thing to an unknown thing to aid the understanding of the unknown. It becomes a pattern in our everyday language that is inevitably encountered with. Metaphor can affect a person in a positive or negative way, but it is an essential part of language that will not go away. The awareness of the effects of metaphor could really enhance a person’s life.
I like how you start your paragraph in the second attempt. It was a nice introduction that was not stereotypical. My suggestion is make sure you explain why they can enhance a persons life.