Attached is all of my comments of a peer’s essay, my 150-word note to the peer, and a rubric checklist done for both of my peers.
150 word note:
I think your paper makes some really reasonable points that you can make a super strong argument with. There are some things I can suggest which could help your paper build even more momentum and cohesion. One thing you can do which will really help you is to introduce your sources so that there is more context before you jump into the quotes. This allows the reader to understand the surrounding conversation. I also advise that you could focus on making your claims focus on what you are arguing in your paragraphs to give an overview and a strong statement. I really like the modes that you are using and the overall argument. The last thing I could suggest to you is that you could make the reader think with a reflective ending to your conclusion. It is already halfway there, but you could further develop your last statement with a question or statement that goes one step further.
Way to finish strong. This looks wonderful. Well done.